Today’s post is written by regular contributor Susan Bearman.
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I started my writing life as a business writer, compelled to try to improve the tortured, often incomprehensible language I found in operating manuals, annual reports, memoranda, and other formats that some bad writers tried to pass off as business “communication”. There seems to be a great misconception that passive voice, undefined acronyms and abbreviations, and loads of jargon make for good business writing.
Not true. All writers—whether writing for business, science, or academia, or those writing fiction and creative nonfiction—should strive for clarity.
But does that mean jargon, slang, and idioms are always taboo? Not if you do your job to make them serve your writing, rather confuse or bore your readers.
Jargon
jargon (noun) — specialized technical terminology characteristic of a particular subject; a characteristic language of a particular group.
To use jargon effectively, you must know your audience. Almost all industries use jargon to some extent, and that’s OK, because most practitioners of a particular profession have a basic understanding of the material and its associated jargon. Business and sports writers are notorious jargon users, as those in medicine and education.
For most writers, the goal is clarity. Unless you have a specific reason to use jargon, it’s best to avoid it. If you must include jargon, be sure to define it or make it understandable within the context of your story.
Bad writing is often the result of too much jargon. While jargon can be helpful when communicating within a specific group, too much jargon, or jargon that is not clearly defined can lead to muddy, confusing writing. If you find yourself having to reread a sentence over and over again, it is often because it contains confusing jargon.
Well-placed jargon in a piece of fiction can lend the voice of authority or the face of authenticity to a particular character. If one of your characters is a pompous Wall Street trader, using some insider jargon will help readers hear his voice on your page. Genre fiction, such as crime fiction, often relies heavily on the use of jargon. Here again, know your audience.
One way to help define jargon in your writing is to spell out acronyms or abbreviations the first time you use them:
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See if you can translate the following jargon into language that could be understood by a general audience (note, I did not make these up). You may need your search engine to help you. How many clicks around the Internet did it take you to understand the original jargon?
- Tender mooring area; please use a long painter.
- Eye of the Leopard managed to collar pacesetter Mr. Foricos Two U at the wire to win by a neck.
- The LNA is the “front end” of the block down-converter.
- The increasingly performative quality of art is becoming the paradigm for a multiplicity of aesthetic practices.
- The MVC (also known as a Mesoscale Convective Vortex (MCV) or a “Neddy eddy”) is best seen in a Java animation of visible imagery, appearing as a cyclonic spiral moving toward Saint Louis, MO.
Slang
slang (noun) — A kind of language occurring chiefly in casual and playful speech, made up typically of short-lived coinages and figures of speech that are deliberately used in place of standard terms for added raciness, humor, irreverence, or other effect.
Slang is the language of the moment. It’s especially common among young people and, therefore, a vital component in writing young adult (YA) literature or writing authentically in the voice of a teen. In a recent issue of TriQuarterly Online, Natalie Haney Tilghman explains: “Slang is a language of exclusion and makes the world of adolescence inaccessible to outsiders, including adults.”
But using slang effectively is tricky. First, by its very nature, slang is short-lived. Words or phrases that sound fresh today may be as moldy as week-old bread by the time your book leaves the presses.
If you do use slang, you have to define it in context and use it frequently enough in your text for it to seem a natural part of the telling of your story. It should sound right coming out of the mouths of your characters. This requires consistency and a good ear. If you’re going to use real slang from a particular community—the hip hop culture, for example—you better get it right or you will lose credibility with your readers.
One way to avoid misusing slang is to make up your own. It’s not that hard; teenagers do it all the time. Mix in a few evergreens like “cool” or “hot” that most readers will immediately recognize as slang, and your imaginary slang will take on a life of its own. Again, consistency and context are key. Who knows, your made-up slang may become the real slang of tomorrow.
Idioms
idiom (noun) — a group of words established by usage as having a meaning not deducible from those of the individual words (e.g. “on pins and needles”, meaning to be worried about something).
Idioms (or colloquialisms) are those turns of phrases that mean something entirely different than the actual words would indicate. Idiom is often synonymous with cliché (a saying or expression that has been so overused that it has become boring and unoriginal), but not all idioms are clichés. Used wisely in fiction or creative nonfiction, a well-chosen idiom can add color and flavor to your writing.
Since many idioms are regional they can be an efficient way of setting a character in a particular time or place. Speech from the American South is often riddled with colorful idioms, and English literature abounds with brilliant uses of idioms:
- Tennessee Williams’ classic Cat on a Hot Tin Roof comes from a much older idiom, “like a cat on hot bricks”; both mean to be jumpy and nervous.
- Shakespeare coined many idioms that are still used today, including: wearing your heart on your sleeve, to come full circle, or to go on a wild-goose chase.
- The classic children’s book Amelia Bedelia, by Peggy Parish, is rife with idioms that confound poor Amelia, as she “dusts the furniture” by putting dust everywhere (why isn’t it “undusting” the furniture?)
Jargon, slang, and idioms are often the culprits on unimaginative and confusing text. But in the hands of good writers, they are just three more tools in your writing toolbox.
Just for Fun
If you’re in need of a few good laughs (or want to feel really good about your own writing), check out the winners of the 2011 Golden Bull Awards from the Plain English Campaign. If any of the examples sound like good writing to you, return to the top of this post and start taking good notes.
Stephanie Scott says
Great post. I took a business writing class through my work and it changed how I write emails. I try to spell out every acronym first to our customers – we have tons – because it can start to sound like a hot mess if I don’t. You never know who that email will get passed on to, saved, or printed in a file that’s kept for years. It’s helped me a lot in my creative writing too.
khaula mazhar says
Any book that has jargon/slang/idioms( too much or not used properly) really does bore the reader. Like the writer has focused too much on trying to impress with their own knowledge ( sometimes actually seems like lack of knowledge!) and forgotten to tell an enjoyable story. I can never force myself to the end, not even out of curiosity for how things turn out.
Susan Bearman says
Khaula, excellent points. We want everything we write to enhance understanding and readability, not scare off our readers.
Susan Bearman says
I think a business writing class is a great idea for all writers. Great point about email, too. We we may have gotten too casual in our business communications, and that could cause problems.
Cindy Brown says
I just made up a word yesterday. I’m going to use it in my next blog post!
Susan Bearman says
Ok, Cindy, just make sure we can understand what you mean from the context.
Cathryn Leigh says
I also have a background in technical writing – only mines all internal procedureal – writing the documents used to manufacture products that are regulated by the government… hard work to balnce them out, but I’ve gotten pretty good at it. The Jargon part at least.
I’m going to have to take notes about slang and idioms. I will say translating some on them to my world has been fun – after all people who don’t have the technology to make glases, wouldn’t say “hind sight is 20/20”. Instead I came up with something along the lines of “the sky is always clealer after the rain”. :}
Susan Bearman says
Cathryn, how about “it’s easier to see yesterday than tomorrow?”
Catherine Stine says
Thanks for clarifying all of these. Too much slang or trendy lingo is definitely discouraged in writing for teens, because it dates so quickly.
Susan Bearman says
Makes perfect sense, Catherine, since slang is fleeting. I remember the words my friends and I used as teenagers and they are long gone except for among the few of us.
james says
Some idioms are so writen frequently, that they are so familier to me
I read the one throw someone under the bus in many books, magazines and newspapers.
Susan Bearman says
James, that’s true. It’s a fine line between idiom and cliche.
Britton Minor says
I will definitely report this romp in the grammar park to the RITGP Society for the concise way you sprayed understanding on my garden of improbable unknowings.
Susan Bearman says
Britton—Rhode Island Town/Gown Partnership? RITGP, INC is incorporated in Texas? I give. What’s the RITGP Society? I do love your witty comments.
Britton Minor says
ha ha: “Romp In The Grammar Park” Society. Now I feel like saying, with a voice only a child could love, “Made ya look (it up)!”
Susan Bearman says
Love it, and yes you did.
runebug says
Geeks are the absolute worst at this, and I can be guilty sometimes. Some of it is elitism, but some of it is just cluelessness. As Stephanie Scott said, acronyms are the absolute worst. I can sometimes go into geeky communities and find an acronym in every sentence.
Do you know the Head First books by Kathy Sierra? I’m a big fan of them, because they are the rare technical books that are written in plain English.
Susan @ 2KoP says
runebug, I’m not familiar with the Head First books, but I’ll have to check them out. Anything for the cause of good writing. Geeks are definitely guilty of jargonese.